Elyse on Chapter 3

I really like the ending, the panic and thoughts and things adding some drama 🙂

But perhaps the last paragraphs could be more broken up?

 

The betrothal gets skipped over mainly by Rainalds thoughts, a good cover for not having to think of a ceremony but it does leave a lot to be desired.

 

Mirella has some more death. She still hurts from losing her betrothed, but that she tries to overcome it through Rainalds betrothal is very good.

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